Swimmingisthebestthinginsummer.Icangetcoolwhenswimmingandmakemefitwell.Inthe2012LondonOlympics,IwatchedYangSunandShiwenYewhocomefromChinahavegotgoldmedals.ITwasabig...
还可以就是字少了点结构不够规范第一段3~4句第二段7~8句第三段3~4句再写一篇行么谢谢
Swimmingisthebestthinginsummer.Icangetcoolwhenswimmingandmakemefitwell.Inthe2012LondonOlympics,IwatchedYangSunandShiwenYewhocomefromChinahavegotgoldmedals.ITwasabigsupriseinChina,andmoreandmorepeplewilllikeswimming.Besides,swimmingismyfavoritehobby,andit'sagoodsportformetogetstronger.Ioftengoswimming,usuallytwiceaweekinsummer.Ofcourse,Ihavemyfavoriteswimmingathlete-he'sPhelps.Fromswimming,Ilearnthatthemorewepractice,thebetterwecando.Myparentsthinkswimmingisagoodhobby,andtheyencouragemetoswimbetter.Asoneofthepopularsports,moreandmoreparentssendtheirchildrentolearnswimming.Theyhopethattheirchildrencangrowuphealthy.Thereforeithinkswimmingwillbecomeimportantlikesleepinginthefuture.