托福独立作文,这篇能的多少分?
Massmedia,asanindispensablepartofpeople’slifeespeciallyinmodernworld,hasbeenexertingunmatchableimpactonbothindividual’slifeandallaspectsofthesociety,intermsoftheissuethatchildren/studentsspenttoomuchtimeonwatchingTV,itshouldberecognizedthatallnegativeoutcomesarenotexactlycausedbyTVitself.AsfarasI’mconcerned,themeritsstudentsacquirefromTVoutweighdemerits.
Firstofall,watchingTVwillnotnecessarilydistractastudentfromstudy.Inotherwords,studentscannotconcentrateontheirstudymainlybecauseofthelackofself-discipline,insteadofspendingtimeonwatchingTV.Therefore,withabalancebetweenthetimespentonestudyandtheoneonrelaxation,students’schoolperformancewillnotbeaffected.Forexample,accordingrecentresearch,onlythestudentswhosparethemajorityoftheirfreetimeencounteredascoredropinexams.
Besides,watchingTV,tosomeextent,promotesone’sacademicperformancebyprovidingrelaxationandrecreation.Since/for/becauseacademicstudyusuallyinvolvesenormousstressandpressure,underwhichallparticipantsneedfindaventtoreleasetheirpressure.WatchingTV,asaneffectiveapproachofentertainment,canundoubtedlyprovidecertainmeansofbalance.Forinstance,itcanhardlyimagineaso-calledwhole-heartedjerkcanachieveanybrillianceinhis/herfuture.Usually,amanwithpromisingfuturehasalotofhobbiesandinterestsbesidesstudy.
Furthermore,studentscanalsolearnalotfrom/viamassmedia.Comparingwithtraditionalmediainpast,combinedwithmodernscienceandtechnologyaswellascivilizedideology,massmediainmodernsocietyisnolongeramerewayofamusement,butacomprehensiveaccesstobothinformationandknowledge.Thatistosay,studentcanobtainacquireenormousknowledgeaccompanyingjoys.Forinstance…
Tosumup,televisionisagreatinvent,isn’tit?
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用5分标准改多少分?
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