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托福独立作文,这篇能的多少分?

Massmedia,asanindispensablepartofpeople’slifeespeciallyinmodernworld,hasbeenexertingunmatchableimpactonbothindividual’slifeandallaspectsofthesociety,intermsoftheissuethatchildren/studentsspenttoomuchtimeonwatchingTV,itshouldberecognizedthatallnegativeoutcomesarenotexactlycausedbyTVitself.AsfarasI’mconcerned,themeritsstudentsacquirefromTVoutweighdemerits.

Firstofall,watchingTVwillnotnecessarilydistractastudentfromstudy.Inotherwords,studentscannotconcentrateontheirstudymainlybecauseofthelackofself-discipline,insteadofspendingtimeonwatchingTV.Therefore,withabalancebetweenthetimespentonestudyandtheoneonrelaxation,students’schoolperformancewillnotbeaffected.Forexample,accordingrecentresearch,onlythestudentswhosparethemajorityoftheirfreetimeencounteredascoredropinexams.

Besides,watchingTV,tosomeextent,promotesone’sacademicperformancebyprovidingrelaxationandrecreation.Since/for/becauseacademicstudyusuallyinvolvesenormousstressandpressure,underwhichallparticipantsneedfindaventtoreleasetheirpressure.WatchingTV,asaneffectiveapproachofentertainment,canundoubtedlyprovidecertainmeansofbalance.Forinstance,itcanhardlyimagineaso-calledwhole-heartedjerkcanachieveanybrillianceinhis/herfuture.Usually,amanwithpromisingfuturehasalotofhobbiesandinterestsbesidesstudy.

Furthermore,studentscanalsolearnalotfrom/viamassmedia.Comparingwithtraditionalmediainpast,combinedwithmodernscienceandtechnologyaswellascivilizedideology,massmediainmodernsocietyisnolongeramerewayofamusement,butacomprehensiveaccesstobothinformationandknowledge.Thatistosay,studentcanobtainacquireenormousknowledgeaccompanyingjoys.Forinstance…

Tosumup,televisionisagreatinvent,isn’tit?

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用5分标准改多少分?

胡成林回答:
  咳咳.感觉25~26分左右,我觉得你的遣词造句有点flowery,有时候简明扼要的语言反而更好,而且结尾比较仓促,是不是来不及了00   4分左右,你有不错的英语功底,但是感觉有些生硬,建议多看看英语杂志,学习一下里面流畅的表达方式
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