请点评以下作文,给出完善建议.
看图作文,给了两张图:
图1:1900年,一条渔船行驶在海面上,海水中有很多鱼
图2:2000年,很多渔船行驶在拥挤的海面上,而海水中只有一条鱼
作文如下,请点评:
Inthepicture,twomodelsareclearlydemonstrated,showingushowtheoceanconditionsamazinglychangedduringnearlyacentury’stime.Inthefirstpicture,theshipissailingcalmlyontheseawhileschoolsoffishareswimminginthesea.Inthesecondpicture,thesituationsharplyswerves,withonlyonefishleftinthesea,thesurfaceoftheseahasbeenswarmedwithships.
Foralmostacentury,theworld’spopulationhasbeenonandonswellingandtherisinglivingstandards,people’sdemandfortheseafoodisgoingup.Tremendousoverfishinghasbeendoneallaroundtheoceans,whichcausedthemarinecreaturesendupwithextinction.Andthemodernfishingtechniqueshastenthespeedofthemarinelife’sdecrease.Sothedrawerexpresseshismindinasarcasticwaybyshowingusthesecondpicture,suggestingthatifmancontinuesinthisway,theoceanswillbeemptyultimately.
Tokeeptheseainanecologicalbalanceisourcommonwish.Sofeasiblemeasuresmustbetakenallovertheworld.Firstly,overfishingshouldbeprohibited.Secondly,wemustpaymoreattentiononthoseendangeredseaspecies.Thirdly,someover-exploitationshouldbesimultaneouslybannedtokeeptheoceanfrombeingpolluted.Theearthisourhomeland,whichispartlymadeupbytheoceans,toloveandtoprotecttheoceansisundoubtedlybenefitingourselves.
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